Here's a few suggestions:
I agree that the transport is too dark in the first picture. It should be brighter overall or its running lights or engines should be lit. I had to clean my screen to see the ship (thanks, I needed to do that anyway).
In the 3rd picture, the actions of the Detroit seem a bit leisurely. I know that the pirate is trying to evade, but pointing the ships in the same direction might give a greater sense of a chase. Maybe making the Detroit much larger and puttting it directly behind the pirate, like it's bearing down on her, would be interesting. To suggest evasion by the pirate, she could be rolling. Making Detroit larger would also emphasize the difference in size. (Think of the opening scene in Star Wars)
For picture four, I like the composition, but agree that it should be punched up a bit. Maybe the pirate can be made bigger in frame, pointed toward and moved to the lower right. I think that the pirate ship shouldn't cover the origin of the phaser beam.
Lastly, maybe three and four could use the other pirate ship as well.
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